お話をまた英語の練習がてら書き始めています。
ラッキーマンツーの時に見てもらったところ・・・、もっとこうしたほうが良いとアドバイスをされたので、只今書き直しております。
ちなみに、こちらは、アドバイスを受ける前の最初に作った部分です。
There was a large park in the city, Ken lived . The park was featureless, but Ken had loved there, since he was a little boy. The park had an old huge cherry tree. He didn't know how old that tree was. but He guessed it was over 500 years old, so, the trunk was mammothlike.
Ken came to see the tree, whenever he had something unpleasant at home or school.He loved to lay down under the tree on lawn, nothing to do, just stay for hours and hours.
Ken was a 15 year old junior highschool student. He had a clear skin and hazel eyes.His hair sometimes looked blonde especially under the sun. (He didn't tried hair dyeing himself at all.) and, he was tall. He was pure Japanese, but his figure looked like quite foreigner. He was really handsome boy so,he was idolized by girls, but it was only first impression before girls would noticed his character. He was so passive character, he always decide himself nothing. He had a lot of friendlike... He had no close friend, but it was not important for him, because he loved that he was alone rather staied with someone else. Ken looked up and gazed blankly at the pale sky which was cravice of light pink froweres. "Actually, I didn't want you...!" He picked up a small stuffed animal in his poket, and then, he took the animal's tail with his fingers and swang it in front of his face. ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::
It happened to him when he went down the street on his way home from his cram school. He had felt thirsty. He turned left at a liquor shop, as look in convenience store , noticed an ancient-looking shop . It seemed curiosity shop. The shop had lots of marvelous furnishings. The shop attract his interest, he propped his bicycle on a wall, and he looke in the shop hardly. The owner noticed Ken and beckoned him into his shop. The owner was about 80 year old, if he straighten his back, he might have been tall. but he was bent with age.. so, he was tall as high as Ken's waist. His hair was thin and white, He wore a deepgreen knitted hat and worn-out yellowish thin sweater. He also wore spectacles. They were very thick glasses. The glasseed made his eyes looked bigger. Ken wanted to leave soon, but he couldn't. He stayed this shop for a long time..until the owner's loooooooooong his history finished. In the end, he let him bought a queer stuffed animal.
