村上春樹の作品の英語版において、アメリカ版とイギリス版で異なる場合がある。基本的には、英訳者はアメリカ人なので、イギリス版において、イギリス版の編集者によって、書き換えが行われているものと推察される。
英語の英米差については、例えば、elevatorとliftなど、事物を指す名詞が異なることはよく知られている。しかし、本項では、冠詞や指示代名詞などにおいても、書き換えが行われている場合を例示する。以下は単なる資料、である。考察はない。
それぞれの項の、上の英文がアメリカ版で、下がイギリス版で、その下に原文を付す。原文末尾に『国』とあるのは『国境の南、太陽の西』、『恋』とあるのは『スプートニクの恋人』の略号である。
(1)定冠詞か不定冠詞か
(a) Throw an ax, and out would pop a fairly, I said, thinking of the fairly tale. (22)
Throw an axe, and out would pop a fairly, I said, thinking of a fairly tale. (19)
斧を放り込んだら妖精が出てきそうだな。(28)『国』
(b) Once she had a part-time job in the warehouse of a drug company and bought me six dozen condoms. (14)
Once she had a job in a warehouse of a drug company and bought me six dozen condoms. (15)
薬品会社の倉庫でアルバイトをしたときにはコンドームを６ダースももらってきてく れた。(21)『恋』
(c) As if this weren’t enough, Sumire was dead set on creating a massive nineteenth-century-style Total Novel, the kind of portmanteau packed with every possible phenomenon in order to capture the soul and human destiny. (14)
As if this weren’t enough, Sumire was dead set on creating a massive nineteenth-century-style Total Novel, a kind of portmanteau packed with every possible phenomenon in order to capture the soul and human destiny. (16)
さらに具合悪いことに、すみれは当時１９世紀的に長大な「全体小説」を書くことにしか興味がなく、そこに魂と運命をめぐるすべての事象をぎっしりとくまなく詰め込もうとしていた。(21)『恋』
(d) On a shelf in their living room was a record of Mozart’s songs, doubtless the one her mother had listened to, (18)
On the record shelf in their living room was a record of Mozart’s songs, doubtless the one her mother had listened to, (19)
居間のレコード棚には『モーツァルト歌曲集』があり（母親が聴いていたものにちがいない）(26)『恋』
(e) “Not bad,” I said, giving her the once-over. (31)
“Not bad,” I said, giving her a complete once-over. (33)
「悪くない」とぼくはひととおり上から下まで観察してから言った。(45)『恋』
(2) 不定冠詞 か Someか
最初の例を除いて、変更されている場合は、アメリカ版で不定冠詞が用いられているところでイギリス版ではsomeが用いられている。
(a) He wasn’t a talkative man to begin with, and in all aspects of life - like they were some ind of mouth infection he wanted to avoid catching - he never talked about his feelings. (10)
He wasn’t a talkative man to begin with, and in all aspects of life - as though it were a kind of mouth infection he wanted to avoid catching - he never talked about his feelings. (11)
もともとがなにごとによらず多くを語らない人だったし、それに加えて生活のあらゆる局面においてあたかもそれが口内感染症の一種であるかのように）情緒的表現を避ける傾向があった。(16)『恋』
(b) He was sitting two tables away, his face turned sideways, talking with a short, elderly man in a morning coat. (19)
He was sitting two tables away, his face turned sideways, talking with some short, elderlyman in a morning coat. (20)
彼はふたつ向こうのテーブルで、こちらに顔を向けて、モーニングを着た実直そうな小柄な老人を相手に何かを語り合っていた。(28)『恋』
(c) Miu’s neck was as slender as the stalk of a plant, he body without an ounce of detectable fat. (35)
Her neck was as slender as the stalk of some plant, he body without an ounce of detectable fat. (38)
ミュウの首はまるで植物の茎みたいに細く、体には贅肉の気配すらなかった。(51)
『恋』
(d) “One day you’ll get married to a nice girl and forget all about me.” (51)
“Some day you’ll get married to some nice girl and forget all about me.” (56)
「あなただってそのうちに、誰かまともな女の人と結婚して、わたしのことなんかぜんぜん忘れちゃうわよね」(77) 『恋』
(e) I felt like I was a meaningless bug clinging for no special reason to a high stone wall on a windy night, with no plans, no beliefs. (77)
I felt like I was some meaningless bug clinging for no special reason to a high stone wallon a windy night, with no plans, no beliefs. (84)
風邪の強い夜に、高い石壁にわけもなく予定もなく信条もなくただへばりついている無意味な虫のような気持ちだった。(113)『恋』
(f) At this very moment he's probably sousing it up in a bar, having a beer or gin, getting even more drunk and forgetting what he 'd done. (151)
At this very moment he's probably getting pissed in some bar, having a beer or gin, getting even more drunk and forgetting what he'd done. (165)
今ごろはどこかの酒場でビールだかジンだかを飲んで、更に酔っぱらって、更に記憶をなくしていることだろう。(221)『恋』
(3) 無冠詞か定冠詞か
(a) Sumire was waiting expectantly, snow-white first page of her notebook open, (10)
Sumire was waiting expectantly, the snow-white first page of her notebook open, (11)
すみれはまっ白なノートの１ページめを広げてじっと待っていたのだ。(16)『恋』
(4)無冠詞かsomeか
(a) I brewed a fresh pot of coffee, pulled a chair over next to the window, and sat there, munching on cheese and crackers. (53)
I brewed a fresh pot of coffee, pulled a chair over next to the window, and sat there, munching on some cheese and crackers. (58)
ぼくは新しい濃いコーヒーを作り、椅子を窓際にもっていってそこに座り、チーズをのせたクラッカーを何枚か食べた。(79)『恋』
(5)無冠詞か所有格か
(a) In the evening she’d have one beer and buy some ready-to-eat food at the supermarket for her dinner. (12)
In the evening she’d have one beer and buy some ready-to-eat food at the supermarket for dinner. (13)
夕方になると一本だけビールを飲み、スーパーマーケットで買ったできあいのものを食べた。(18)『恋』
(6) 不定冠詞か所有格か
(a) This being said, Sumire’s writing had a remarkable freshness about it, an attempt to honestly portray what was important to her. (14)
Having said that, Sumire’s writing had a remarkable freshness about it, her attempt to honestly portray what was important to her. (16)
しかしいくつかの問題点を抱えながらも、彼女の書く文章には独特の鮮やかさがあり、自分の中にある何か大事なものを正直に書ききろうというまっすぐな心持が感じ
られた。(22)『恋』
(b) I hesitated about packing a swimsuit and ended up taking it. (81)
I hesitated about packing my swimming trunks and ended up taking them. (90)
水着については少し迷ったが、結局持っていくことにした。(121)『恋』
(c) Her long hair blew in the breeze as she chatted with a girl friend. (87)
Her long hair blew in the breeze as she chatted to her girl friend. (96)
彼女は長い髪をなびかせながら、隣の友達と熱心に話しこんでいた。(129)『恋』
(7) 定冠詞か所有格か
(a) She avoided looking at the naked skin as she continued to wipe the sweat off Sumire’s body, all the while replaying in her mind a Bach piece she’d memorized as a child. (113)
She avoided looking at her naked skin as she continued to wipe away the sweat from Sumire’s body, all the while replaying in her mind a Bach piece she’d memorized as a child. (124)
出来るだけその肌から目をそらし、子供のころに暗譜したバッハの小曲を頭の中でた
どりながら、タオルを使ってすみれの身体の汗を静かに拭った。(165)『恋』
(b) I couldn't read any of her emotions behind that smile. (143)
I couldn't read any of the emotions behind that smile. (125)
しかし僕はその微笑の中に、彼女がそのときに抱いている感情らしきものをほとんど読み取ることができなかった。(194)『国』
(8) that か定冠詞か
(a) It didn't hurt, but the strength of that grip took my breath away. (61)
It didn't hurt, but the strength of the grip took my breath away. (54)
痛いというわけではない。でもそこにこめられた力の強さは僕の息をつまらせた。
(82)『国』
(b) Those shrill calls echoed in the leaf-blanketed woods, crossed the river, and rang unpleasantly in our ears. (113)
Their shrill calls echoed in the leaf-blanketed woods, crossed the river and rang unpleasantly in our ears. (100)
その声は葉を落とした林の中に冷え冷えと反響し、川面を渡り、僕らの耳を刺した。
(154)『国』
(9) thisか定冠詞か
(a) She realized I was following her, went into this coffee shop, and called this man. (63)
She had realized I was following her, had gone the cafe shop, and called this man. (56)
たぶん彼女は僕が後をつけていることを悟って、喫茶店に入り、電話をかけてこの男を呼んだのだろう。(85)『国』
(10)不定冠詞か指示形容詞か
(a)"But sometimes you could hear these performances that would blow you away." (107)
"But sometimes you would hear a performance that would blow you away." (94)
「でもときどきひっくりかえるくらい凄い演奏が聴けた」(146)『国』
(11) ThisかThatか
(a) This being said, Sumire’s writing had a remarkable freshness about it, an attempt to honestly portray what was important to her. (14)
Having said that, Sumire’s writing had a remarkable freshness about it, her attempt to honestly portray what was important to her. (16)
しかしいくつかの問題点を抱えながらも、彼女の書く文章には独特の鮮やかさがあり、自分の中にある何か大事なものを正直に書ききろうというまっすぐな心持が感じ
られた。(22)『恋』
(b) This must be what they mean by atavism, they think. (20)
That must be what they mean by atavism, they think. (21)
「こういうのって隔世遺伝なのかなって」(29)『恋』
(c) When Miu went back into her room, Sumire’s eyes were open. (114)
When Miu went back into the room, Sumire’s eyes were open. (125)
部屋に戻ったとき、すみれは目を開けていた。(166)『恋』
(12) That かItか
(a) That was my face, all right, but where did that look come from? (68)
It was my face, all right, but where did that look come from? (74)
それは確かにぼくの顔だったが、そこにあるのは僕の表情ではなかった。(100)
『恋』
(b) They'd greet me in a loud voice: "Kali mera!" I'd say the same thing back to them. I figured that was the thing to do. (126)
They'd greet me in a loud voice: "Kali mera!" I'd say the same thing back to them.I supposed it was the thing to do (139)
彼らは大きな声でぼくにあいさつをした。「カリメエエラ！」と彼らは言った。僕も同じあいさつを返した。たぶん それで正しいのだろう。(184)『恋』
(c) He pondered that. (78)
He thought about it. (68)
彼はしばらく考えていた。(105)『国』
(13) 指示代名詞か人称代名詞か
(a) Problem is, once I sit at my desk and put all these down on paper, I realize something vital is missing. (15)
Problem is, once I sit at my desk and put them down on paper, I realize something vital is missing. (15)
でもいざ机に向かって文章にしてみると、何か大事なものが失われてしまっているの
がわかる。(22)『恋』
(b) The music played on softly. Vivaldi or Telemann. One of those. (192)
The music played on softly. Vivaldi or Telemann. One of them. (169)
音楽が小さな音で流れていた。ヴィヴァルディかテレマンか、そういう音楽だった。
(268)『国』
英語の英米差については、例えば、elevatorとliftなど、事物を指す名詞が異なることはよく知られている。しかし、本項では、冠詞や指示代名詞などにおいても、書き換えが行われている場合を例示する。以下は単なる資料、である。考察はない。
それぞれの項の、上の英文がアメリカ版で、下がイギリス版で、その下に原文を付す。原文末尾に『国』とあるのは『国境の南、太陽の西』、『恋』とあるのは『スプートニクの恋人』の略号である。
(1)定冠詞か不定冠詞か
(a) Throw an ax, and out would pop a fairly, I said, thinking of the fairly tale. (22)
Throw an axe, and out would pop a fairly, I said, thinking of a fairly tale. (19)
斧を放り込んだら妖精が出てきそうだな。(28)『国』
(b) Once she had a part-time job in the warehouse of a drug company and bought me six dozen condoms. (14)
Once she had a job in a warehouse of a drug company and bought me six dozen condoms. (15)
薬品会社の倉庫でアルバイトをしたときにはコンドームを６ダースももらってきてく れた。(21)『恋』
(c) As if this weren’t enough, Sumire was dead set on creating a massive nineteenth-century-style Total Novel, the kind of portmanteau packed with every possible phenomenon in order to capture the soul and human destiny. (14)
As if this weren’t enough, Sumire was dead set on creating a massive nineteenth-century-style Total Novel, a kind of portmanteau packed with every possible phenomenon in order to capture the soul and human destiny. (16)
さらに具合悪いことに、すみれは当時１９世紀的に長大な「全体小説」を書くことにしか興味がなく、そこに魂と運命をめぐるすべての事象をぎっしりとくまなく詰め込もうとしていた。(21)『恋』
(d) On a shelf in their living room was a record of Mozart’s songs, doubtless the one her mother had listened to, (18)
On the record shelf in their living room was a record of Mozart’s songs, doubtless the one her mother had listened to, (19)
居間のレコード棚には『モーツァルト歌曲集』があり（母親が聴いていたものにちがいない）(26)『恋』
(e) “Not bad,” I said, giving her the once-over. (31)
“Not bad,” I said, giving her a complete once-over. (33)
「悪くない」とぼくはひととおり上から下まで観察してから言った。(45)『恋』
(2) 不定冠詞 か Someか
最初の例を除いて、変更されている場合は、アメリカ版で不定冠詞が用いられているところでイギリス版ではsomeが用いられている。
(a) He wasn’t a talkative man to begin with, and in all aspects of life - like they were some ind of mouth infection he wanted to avoid catching - he never talked about his feelings. (10)
He wasn’t a talkative man to begin with, and in all aspects of life - as though it were a kind of mouth infection he wanted to avoid catching - he never talked about his feelings. (11)
もともとがなにごとによらず多くを語らない人だったし、それに加えて生活のあらゆる局面においてあたかもそれが口内感染症の一種であるかのように）情緒的表現を避ける傾向があった。(16)『恋』
(b) He was sitting two tables away, his face turned sideways, talking with a short, elderly man in a morning coat. (19)
He was sitting two tables away, his face turned sideways, talking with some short, elderlyman in a morning coat. (20)
彼はふたつ向こうのテーブルで、こちらに顔を向けて、モーニングを着た実直そうな小柄な老人を相手に何かを語り合っていた。(28)『恋』
(c) Miu’s neck was as slender as the stalk of a plant, he body without an ounce of detectable fat. (35)
Her neck was as slender as the stalk of some plant, he body without an ounce of detectable fat. (38)
ミュウの首はまるで植物の茎みたいに細く、体には贅肉の気配すらなかった。(51)
『恋』
(d) “One day you’ll get married to a nice girl and forget all about me.” (51)
“Some day you’ll get married to some nice girl and forget all about me.” (56)
「あなただってそのうちに、誰かまともな女の人と結婚して、わたしのことなんかぜんぜん忘れちゃうわよね」(77) 『恋』
(e) I felt like I was a meaningless bug clinging for no special reason to a high stone wall on a windy night, with no plans, no beliefs. (77)
I felt like I was some meaningless bug clinging for no special reason to a high stone wallon a windy night, with no plans, no beliefs. (84)
風邪の強い夜に、高い石壁にわけもなく予定もなく信条もなくただへばりついている無意味な虫のような気持ちだった。(113)『恋』
(f) At this very moment he's probably sousing it up in a bar, having a beer or gin, getting even more drunk and forgetting what he 'd done. (151)
At this very moment he's probably getting pissed in some bar, having a beer or gin, getting even more drunk and forgetting what he'd done. (165)
今ごろはどこかの酒場でビールだかジンだかを飲んで、更に酔っぱらって、更に記憶をなくしていることだろう。(221)『恋』
(3) 無冠詞か定冠詞か
(a) Sumire was waiting expectantly, snow-white first page of her notebook open, (10)
Sumire was waiting expectantly, the snow-white first page of her notebook open, (11)
すみれはまっ白なノートの１ページめを広げてじっと待っていたのだ。(16)『恋』
(4)無冠詞かsomeか
(a) I brewed a fresh pot of coffee, pulled a chair over next to the window, and sat there, munching on cheese and crackers. (53)
I brewed a fresh pot of coffee, pulled a chair over next to the window, and sat there, munching on some cheese and crackers. (58)
ぼくは新しい濃いコーヒーを作り、椅子を窓際にもっていってそこに座り、チーズをのせたクラッカーを何枚か食べた。(79)『恋』
(5)無冠詞か所有格か
(a) In the evening she’d have one beer and buy some ready-to-eat food at the supermarket for her dinner. (12)
In the evening she’d have one beer and buy some ready-to-eat food at the supermarket for dinner. (13)
夕方になると一本だけビールを飲み、スーパーマーケットで買ったできあいのものを食べた。(18)『恋』
(6) 不定冠詞か所有格か
(a) This being said, Sumire’s writing had a remarkable freshness about it, an attempt to honestly portray what was important to her. (14)
Having said that, Sumire’s writing had a remarkable freshness about it, her attempt to honestly portray what was important to her. (16)
しかしいくつかの問題点を抱えながらも、彼女の書く文章には独特の鮮やかさがあり、自分の中にある何か大事なものを正直に書ききろうというまっすぐな心持が感じ
られた。(22)『恋』
(b) I hesitated about packing a swimsuit and ended up taking it. (81)
I hesitated about packing my swimming trunks and ended up taking them. (90)
水着については少し迷ったが、結局持っていくことにした。(121)『恋』
(c) Her long hair blew in the breeze as she chatted with a girl friend. (87)
Her long hair blew in the breeze as she chatted to her girl friend. (96)
彼女は長い髪をなびかせながら、隣の友達と熱心に話しこんでいた。(129)『恋』
(7) 定冠詞か所有格か
(a) She avoided looking at the naked skin as she continued to wipe the sweat off Sumire’s body, all the while replaying in her mind a Bach piece she’d memorized as a child. (113)
She avoided looking at her naked skin as she continued to wipe away the sweat from Sumire’s body, all the while replaying in her mind a Bach piece she’d memorized as a child. (124)
出来るだけその肌から目をそらし、子供のころに暗譜したバッハの小曲を頭の中でた
どりながら、タオルを使ってすみれの身体の汗を静かに拭った。(165)『恋』
(b) I couldn't read any of her emotions behind that smile. (143)
I couldn't read any of the emotions behind that smile. (125)
しかし僕はその微笑の中に、彼女がそのときに抱いている感情らしきものをほとんど読み取ることができなかった。(194)『国』
(8) that か定冠詞か
(a) It didn't hurt, but the strength of that grip took my breath away. (61)
It didn't hurt, but the strength of the grip took my breath away. (54)
痛いというわけではない。でもそこにこめられた力の強さは僕の息をつまらせた。
(82)『国』
(b) Those shrill calls echoed in the leaf-blanketed woods, crossed the river, and rang unpleasantly in our ears. (113)
Their shrill calls echoed in the leaf-blanketed woods, crossed the river and rang unpleasantly in our ears. (100)
その声は葉を落とした林の中に冷え冷えと反響し、川面を渡り、僕らの耳を刺した。
(154)『国』
(9) thisか定冠詞か
(a) She realized I was following her, went into this coffee shop, and called this man. (63)
She had realized I was following her, had gone the cafe shop, and called this man. (56)
たぶん彼女は僕が後をつけていることを悟って、喫茶店に入り、電話をかけてこの男を呼んだのだろう。(85)『国』
(10)不定冠詞か指示形容詞か
(a)"But sometimes you could hear these performances that would blow you away." (107)
"But sometimes you would hear a performance that would blow you away." (94)
「でもときどきひっくりかえるくらい凄い演奏が聴けた」(146)『国』
(11) ThisかThatか
(a) This being said, Sumire’s writing had a remarkable freshness about it, an attempt to honestly portray what was important to her. (14)
Having said that, Sumire’s writing had a remarkable freshness about it, her attempt to honestly portray what was important to her. (16)
しかしいくつかの問題点を抱えながらも、彼女の書く文章には独特の鮮やかさがあり、自分の中にある何か大事なものを正直に書ききろうというまっすぐな心持が感じ
られた。(22)『恋』
(b) This must be what they mean by atavism, they think. (20)
That must be what they mean by atavism, they think. (21)
「こういうのって隔世遺伝なのかなって」(29)『恋』
(c) When Miu went back into her room, Sumire’s eyes were open. (114)
When Miu went back into the room, Sumire’s eyes were open. (125)
部屋に戻ったとき、すみれは目を開けていた。(166)『恋』
(12) That かItか
(a) That was my face, all right, but where did that look come from? (68)
It was my face, all right, but where did that look come from? (74)
それは確かにぼくの顔だったが、そこにあるのは僕の表情ではなかった。(100)
『恋』
(b) They'd greet me in a loud voice: "Kali mera!" I'd say the same thing back to them. I figured that was the thing to do. (126)
They'd greet me in a loud voice: "Kali mera!" I'd say the same thing back to them.I supposed it was the thing to do (139)
彼らは大きな声でぼくにあいさつをした。「カリメエエラ！」と彼らは言った。僕も同じあいさつを返した。たぶん それで正しいのだろう。(184)『恋』
(c) He pondered that. (78)
He thought about it. (68)
彼はしばらく考えていた。(105)『国』
(13) 指示代名詞か人称代名詞か
(a) Problem is, once I sit at my desk and put all these down on paper, I realize something vital is missing. (15)
Problem is, once I sit at my desk and put them down on paper, I realize something vital is missing. (15)
でもいざ机に向かって文章にしてみると、何か大事なものが失われてしまっているの
がわかる。(22)『恋』
(b) The music played on softly. Vivaldi or Telemann. One of those. (192)
The music played on softly. Vivaldi or Telemann. One of them. (169)
音楽が小さな音で流れていた。ヴィヴァルディかテレマンか、そういう音楽だった。
(268)『国』