Q6: Do you think more foreigners will visit Japan in the future?

A: I think more foreings will visit Japan in the future. ① 

I have two reasons for this. First of all it is easy to ge around. ② 

For example they can go by train any where. ③ 

Second of all there are lot of tourist spots. ④ 

For instance there are many temples and shrines in Kyoto. ⑤ 

In conclusion I think more foreings will visit Japan in the future. ⑥ 

合計 65 語 

修正

① Foreings ミススペル→ foreigners 

② First of all ”,” カンマ/ ge ミススペル→ go around ”in big cities” ※都市部 のみアクセスしやすい。

 ③ For example “,” ←カンマ/ go “anywhere” by train 

④ Second of all “,” ←カンマ/ lot of → “a” lot of 

⑤ For instance “,” ←カンマ/

⑥ In conclusion “,” ←カンマ/ foreings ミススペル→ foreigners 

※お題が foreigners なら仕方がないが、foreigner はNGと言う人もいるので、　語数が許すなら foreign people の方が better. 

清書 

I think “that” more foreigners will visit Japan in the future. 

I have two reasons for this. 

First, it is easy to go around in big cities. 

For example, they can go anywhere by train. 

Second, there are a lot of tourist spots. 

For instance, there are many “beautiful” temples and shrines in Kyoto. 

In conclusion, I think “that” more foreigners will visit Japan in the future. 

合計 68 語 ※語数の関係で編集しました。 

Q5: Do you think it is good for children to watch TV?

A: I think it is good for children to watch TV. I have two reasons for this. 

First, they can get information on TV. ① 

For example, I watch news when I get new information. ② 

Second, I can learn cooking by cooking program. ③ 

In my experience I can cook curry and rice when I watch cooking program. ④ 

I think watching TV is good for children. ⑤ 

合計 63 語 

修正

① 語数を増やしたい時は、”many kinds of “ “useful” information 

② I watch news “every morning” “and always learn new things from it.” 

※オリジナルだと First と For example で同じことを言っているので NG。 news は不可算名詞。 ※語数を増やすには、First of all, Second of all, 

③ by cooking program → by/with cooking program”s”/shows 

④ I can cook curry and rice〜. → it is better for me to cook along with the programs/shows. 

⑤ In conclusion,(結論として) I think “that” 〜. 

closing は、opening と同じでOK。 

清書

 I think it is good for children to watch TV. I have two reasons for this. 16 

First, they can get many kinds of useful information. 9 

For example. I watch the news on TV every morning 

and always learn new things from it. 16 

Second, I can learn cooking by cooking programs. 8 

It is better for me to cook along with them. 10

In conclusion, I think that it is good for children to watch TV. 13 

合計 64 語

Q4; Do you think students should read a newspaper more often?

A: I think that students should read a newspaper more often. 

First, it make our habit of reading newspaper everyday. ① 

For example, we get reading comprehension if we read newspaper. ② 

Second, newspaper have a lot of information. 

For example. we can know a bout current topics. ③ 

This is why I think it for students should read a newspaper. ④ 

合計 57 語 

修正

① it make → it makes or it can make/ our → their/ newspaper → a newspaper/ everyday → every day 

② we get → they can get/ we read → they read “it” 

③ newspaper → newspapers For example → For instance 同じ表現の反復を避ける we can know → they can learn/ a bout → about 

④ it for → that/ more often 書き忘れ 

清書 

I think that students should read a newspaper more often. I

 have two reasons for this. ※ 6 語 固定表現 

First, it can make their habit of reading a newspaper every day. 

For example, they can get reading comprehension if they read it. 

Second, newspapers have a lot of information. 

For instance, they can learn about current topics. 

This is why I think that students should read a newspaper more often. 

合計 67 語

Q3: Do you think schools should have more activities for their students?

A: I think that schools should have more sports activities for their students. 

First, playing sports are good for the health. 

① For example, we can shape up our bodies. 

② Second, playing sports are fun. For example, 

③ there are many people who like sports ④ and they want play more. 

⑤ That is why I think it for schools should have more sports activities. ⑥ 

合計 60 語 

修正

① are → is ※playing で判定/ the health → their health 

② we → they/ our → their ※生徒達の話をしているから 

③ are → is/ For example → For instance ※同じ単語、フレーズの反復を避ける 

④ many → a lot of ※語数を増やそう/ people → students 

⑤ want play more → want “to” play “them” more 

⑥ it for → that/ + for their students 書き忘れ 

清書 

 I think schools should have more sports activities for their students. I

 have two reasons for this. ※ 6 語 固定表現 

First, playing sports is good for their health. 

For example, they can shape up their bodies. 31 

Second, playing sports is fun. 

For instance, a lot of students want to play them more. 

That is why I think schools should have more sports activities for their students. 合計 64 語 

※70 語以下にするため、意味を変えずに文（語数）を 微調整しました。

Q2: Do you think people should have priority seats on trains?

A: I think that we should have priority seats on trains. ① I have two reasons. ② First, we have to kind for old people. For example, lot of old people is weak very much. 

③ Second, we have to kind for pregnant woman. For example, she has to keep a good condition for her childe. ④ 

This is why I think that we should have priority seats on trains. ⑤ 

合計 65 語 

修正

① we → お題が we でない限り、一般論として主語は people で述べる。 

② 語数に神経質になろう→ I have two reasons “for this”. これで 2 語プラス！ ③ we have to kind for → “people” have to “be” kind “to”/ lot of → a lot of is → are/ very much →aging people are getting weaker and weaker old → elderly 初老の、年配の あるいは aging 年をとっている ※old people は少し失礼です。 ④ we have to kind for pregnant woman → we “should be helpful to” pregnant “women” 複数形/ For example → For instance she has to → they need to/ her chillde → their babies ※Second では First で使用した単語をなるべく使わない。 

⑤ we → people 

清書

I think that people should have priority seats on trains. 

I have two reasons for this. 

First, people have to be kind to elderly people. 

For example, senior citizens are becoming physically weaker.

Second, people should be helpful to pregnant women who need to stay healthy for their babies. 

In conclusion, I think that people should have priority seats on trains. 

合計 65 語