Q24: Do you think it is a good idea for students to ride their bicycles to school?

A: I think it is a good idea for students to ride their bicycles to school.

I have two reasons for this.

First of all, they can save many because it is not necessary for student to buy train tickets. ①

Second, ride bike is a lot of fun. ②

For example, it feels refreshing. ③

In conclusion, I think it is a good idea for students to ride their bicycles to school.

① many → money/ student → them/ train → train or bus

② ride bike → "riding a" bike 自転車に乗ること

　※いきなり動詞は命令文かと思われてしまいますよ＞＜

③ 普通に②とつなげた方が良いですね。

　 Riding a bike is a lot of fun, and it feels refreshing.

小さなミスに気を付けて、文のつながりも考えられるようになると、

満点狙えます！

Q24: Do you think more people will use electric cars in the future?

A: I think more people will use electric cars in the future.

I have two reasons.

First, electric cars are good for the environment.

For example, they do not produce CO2.

Second, they are becoming easier for people to use. 

For instance, some electric cars can be charged through an electric outlet.　※outlet コンセント

In conclusion, I think more and more people will use electric cars in the near future.　

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Q23: What is the best age for people to start learning English?

A: I think six years old is best age. ①
I have two reasons.
First, six years old children can go to cram school. ②
For example, it is fun for six years old children to learn English with their friends. ③
Second, they can increase their knowledge. ④
For instance, they can use English for work in the future. ⑤
In conclusion, l think six years old is best age. ⑥

今回のお題は、英語を学び始めるのにどの年齢が一番か?

① six years old is best age → "the" best age is six years old.

② 「6歳の子ども達でも塾に通えると、友だちと英語を学ぶことは

　６歳の子ども達にとって楽しい」では理由として分かりづらいので、

　単に、「６歳から（小）学校に通い始めるから、英語を学ぶのに適すると思う」で良いと思いますよ。

　これを英語にしてみよう！

③ six years old → six-year-old も可！

④ 英語を学び始めるのに最も適した年齢はいつかで、６歳だとFirstで答えました。

　 その理由をSecondでもう一つ上げる必要がありますが、

　 「知識を増やすことができる」だとつながらないですし、

　 「将来、英語が仕事で使える」においても分かりづらいので、

　First で、学校に通い始めるのが６歳だから、とするなら、

　Secondでは、学校で友だちと学ぶ方が効果的だと書いてはどうでしょう。

　以上をふまえて、もう一度練り直して書いてみましょう！

　

Q23: Do you think students should have a longer vacation?

A: I think students should have a longer vacation. I have two reasons for this.

First of all, they need a lot of time. ①

For example, they can spend a lot of time to least favorite subjects. ②

Second of all, they can go to trip. ③

For instance, they can meet their grand parents. ④
In conclusion, I think students should have a longer vacation.

① 何のための時間が必要か書きましょう。to 動詞～

    ex: to catch up on their study 勉強の遅れを取り戻す

② to least favorite subjects → to "study" "their" least favorite subjects.

③ go to trip → go on a trip

④ meet → see/ grand parents → grandparents

※なんとか合格点はもらえるでしょう！

Q:22 Do you agree or disagree with homeschooling?

A: I disagree with home schooling. ① I have two reasons for this.

First of all, they can not make friends. ②

For example. they can not increase their knowledge by opinion of other people. ③

Second of all, it is not fun to study alone. ④

For instance, it is difficult for children to studying for a long time. ⑤

In conclusion, I disagree with home schooling. ⑥

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① ⑥ home schooling → homeschooling

② ③のFor example の内容とリンクしていない。

③ by opinion of other people → by "the" opinion of other "students"

 ※ここでは、学校に行けば友達と勉強したり、給食を食べたり、

 　放課後遊べると書いた方が良いですね。

④ ⑤の内容とのつながりが分かりづらい。

 ※ここで、友だちの意見から学ぶチャンスがないことを書きましょう。

⑤ to studying → to study

もう一度、内容を見直して書いてみましょう！